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[ red_a02 ] Shuzhen – The first episode was a lot of fun, cos it had an interesting cocktail of sexual tension and smooth fight choreography. This episode is like the awkward aftermath...
27 Aquarius 13 18:13
[ vermilion_2 ] YAPX – I understand that most of your stories are dialogue-based and heavy on retorts and counter-retorts. This one felt unnecessarily circular. It starts with a cool premise: a killer/villain/vigilante uses Lent to swear off something that should be second nature to him (I suppose), and then talks about a story. The link between the two (giving up killing & the story) isn’t a 100% fit. Maybe instead of “let me tell you a story”, it could be “hey, you see I even passed a guy up for death today!” or equivalent. Something to drag Lorelei into the banter and the premise. // That’s my only complaint. I’m not a big fan of dialogue-based stories, but I can make a exception for this.
14 Aquarius 13 08:03
[ 130204 ] YAPX – Good pace, good characters, great dialogue. The thing I like best is a combination of the three: how you build up their pseudo-relationship through all that back-and-forth exchange. Somehow, you craft a unique, strange relationship: from any one point in the story, both of them are manipulative, victimised and hypocrites - though not all at once. // On word choices, I felt you could change the word “janitor” (“cleaner” or “uncle” would’ve given a different, but more acute local flavour to it). Mostly because, it’s connotes an added level of difference through: class. Whether or not you intended it, by portraying the “janitor” and “student” you bring out the fact that he’s stuck there socially in all sense of the word. It made the part where he says he reads books during weekends completely out-of-context and weird. // Also, there’s too much “sliding” in and out of the room. Not sure if that’s intentional repetition, or just a lack of other words. // I thought that the girl’s own background is pretty compelling. Even after everything, I can’t tell if she’s speaking the truth. Because I’m all for unreliable narrators and characters, I can still find her well-thought out. But other readers might lose patience or wonder at her sudden change of heart at the final moment.
04 Aquarius 13 08:48
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Aphorisms of Earth and Sky ♠ 24 Can♋er 2k5, Sun Lord’s Day ♣ |  |
♠ Laughter comes from the stomach, grief from the throat. They both travel upwards, swift, barely noticable in their alacrity, seeking release, like an invading spirit gushing through a house. Grief blocks up the nostrils, laughter bursts out through the mouth. One makes you wish you could live forever, the other merely feels that way.
♠ When she made me laugh, and she made me happy, I would have moved the earth to keep that. But when she no longer made me laugh, and she no longer made me happy, what was the point of keeping that? Even during the new moon, when she hides her face, she is still in the sky; but no one prays for the new moon, they only pray for the full moon to return. Sometimes though, even the moon can leave the sky.
♠ Nothing on heaven or earth can tear asunder two people who’s heart beat as one. Nothing. Amor vincit omnia. The only thing that seperates lovers are the lovers themselves. It is the only thing that ever has, because it is the only thing that ever can.
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