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[ red_a02 ] Shuzhen – The first episode was a lot of fun, cos it had an interesting cocktail of sexual tension and smooth fight choreography. This episode is like the awkward aftermath...
27 Aquarius 13 18:13
[ vermilion_2 ] YAPX – I understand that most of your stories are dialogue-based and heavy on retorts and counter-retorts. This one felt unnecessarily circular. It starts with a cool premise: a killer/villain/vigilante uses Lent to swear off something that should be second nature to him (I suppose), and then talks about a story. The link between the two (giving up killing & the story) isn’t a 100% fit. Maybe instead of “let me tell you a story”, it could be “hey, you see I even passed a guy up for death today!” or equivalent. Something to drag Lorelei into the banter and the premise. // That’s my only complaint. I’m not a big fan of dialogue-based stories, but I can make a exception for this.
14 Aquarius 13 08:03
[ 130204 ] YAPX – Good pace, good characters, great dialogue. The thing I like best is a combination of the three: how you build up their pseudo-relationship through all that back-and-forth exchange. Somehow, you craft a unique, strange relationship: from any one point in the story, both of them are manipulative, victimised and hypocrites - though not all at once. // On word choices, I felt you could change the word “janitor” (“cleaner” or “uncle” would’ve given a different, but more acute local flavour to it). Mostly because, it’s connotes an added level of difference through: class. Whether or not you intended it, by portraying the “janitor” and “student” you bring out the fact that he’s stuck there socially in all sense of the word. It made the part where he says he reads books during weekends completely out-of-context and weird. // Also, there’s too much “sliding” in and out of the room. Not sure if that’s intentional repetition, or just a lack of other words. // I thought that the girl’s own background is pretty compelling. Even after everything, I can’t tell if she’s speaking the truth. Because I’m all for unreliable narrators and characters, I can still find her well-thought out. But other readers might lose patience or wonder at her sudden change of heart at the final moment.
04 Aquarius 13 08:48
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RIP, Gary Gygax ♠ 07 Pi♓es 2k8, Frigg’s Day ♣ |  |
I don’t think life would have turned out quite the same way if it wasn’t for D&D. Talking about what could have been is always kind of silly, because, as Heinland said, “when it’s time to railroad, people railroad,” or something thus.
Even if Gygax hadn’t created D&D, someone else would have, but the fact of the matter is that he did.
And from D&D came the earliest computer games, and the earliest multiplayer computer games, which evolved into better computer games and MMPOGs, which helped bring up a generation for which fantasy and sci-fi aren’t so much the indulgences of a fringe group. And as this group grew up, their other pasttimes became more acceptable in the mainstream, and thus we have movies like the Matrix and 300.
Or something thus.
I spent years playing D&D, then AD&D 2nd Ed.
So, thank you, Mr. Gygax.
This was done by making a list of likely words. I then asked the members of my gaming group, and my family, to choose that one, or that combination of words, that they found best suited the game, and appealed most. When my youngest daughter, Cindy, added her eager approval to the combination of "Dungeon" and "Dragon," that confirmed my choice, and that of most of the others too.| « Living in Sin – Home Team Scores a Goal! Shoots Dead Murderer at Outram MRT « |  | » Heroes Desperate. Housewives Damages Prison. Break Grey’s Anatomy. » |
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