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[ red_a02 ] Shuzhen – The first episode was a lot of fun, cos it had an interesting cocktail of sexual tension and smooth fight choreography. This episode is like the awkward aftermath...
27 Aquarius 13 18:13
[ vermilion_2 ] YAPX – I understand that most of your stories are dialogue-based and heavy on retorts and counter-retorts. This one felt unnecessarily circular. It starts with a cool premise: a killer/villain/vigilante uses Lent to swear off something that should be second nature to him (I suppose), and then talks about a story. The link between the two (giving up killing & the story) isn’t a 100% fit. Maybe instead of “let me tell you a story”, it could be “hey, you see I even passed a guy up for death today!” or equivalent. Something to drag Lorelei into the banter and the premise. // That’s my only complaint. I’m not a big fan of dialogue-based stories, but I can make a exception for this.
14 Aquarius 13 08:03
[ 130204 ] YAPX – Good pace, good characters, great dialogue. The thing I like best is a combination of the three: how you build up their pseudo-relationship through all that back-and-forth exchange. Somehow, you craft a unique, strange relationship: from any one point in the story, both of them are manipulative, victimised and hypocrites - though not all at once. // On word choices, I felt you could change the word “janitor” (“cleaner” or “uncle” would’ve given a different, but more acute local flavour to it). Mostly because, it’s connotes an added level of difference through: class. Whether or not you intended it, by portraying the “janitor” and “student” you bring out the fact that he’s stuck there socially in all sense of the word. It made the part where he says he reads books during weekends completely out-of-context and weird. // Also, there’s too much “sliding” in and out of the room. Not sure if that’s intentional repetition, or just a lack of other words. // I thought that the girl’s own background is pretty compelling. Even after everything, I can’t tell if she’s speaking the truth. Because I’m all for unreliable narrators and characters, I can still find her well-thought out. But other readers might lose patience or wonder at her sudden change of heart at the final moment.
04 Aquarius 13 08:48
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– 21 Le♌ 11, Sun Lord’s Day [ canon shot ]
♥ Jill, Headhunter
– 20 Le♌ 11, Saturn’s Day [ eden poetry ]
♥ shot – Rouge Noir
– 17 Le♌ 11, Woden’s Day [ canon shot ]
♥ shot – Vermilion Interlute: Lent
– 13 Le♌ 11, Saturn’s Day [ canon shot ]
♥ Commitment
– 12 Le♌ 11, Frigg’s Day
♥ Love and a Red Flowchart
– 11 Le♌ 11, Thor’s Day
♥ poem – Rub-a-Dub-Dub, Part III
– 10 Le♌ 11, Woden’s Day [ eden poetry ]
♥ Rub-a-Dub-Dub, Part II½
– 09 Le♌ 11, Tyr’s Day [ eden poetry ]
♥ poem – Rub-a-Dub-Dub, Part II
– 08 Le♌ 11, Moon’s Day [ eden poetry ]
♥ I Came. I Saw.
– 07 Le♌ 11, Sun Lord’s Day [ verses ]
♥ poem – Red: Friends in High Places
– 06 Le♌ 11, Saturn’s Day [ eden poetry ]
♥ poem – Red: Chasing
– 05 Le♌ 11, Frigg’s Day [ eden poetry ]
♥ poem – Wings
– 31 Can♋er 11, Sun Lord’s Day [ eden poetry ]
♥ short story – Red VII: The Colour of Her Consanguinity
– 30 Can♋er 11, Saturn’s Day [ canon ]
♥ The Sims Medieval Tips and Tricks
– 13 Can♋er 11, Woden’s Day [ gaming PC The Sims The Sims Medieval ]
♥ Alice Madness Returns DLC Download Code
– 19 Ge♊ini 11, Sun Lord’s Day [ gaming PC Alice Alice Madness Returns ]
♥ short story – Blue 1: The Ease of Her Extraction
– 22 A♈ies 11, Frigg’s Day [ canon ]
♥ shot – Red Interlude: A Dark Alley
– 20 Ge♊ini 11, Moon’s Day [ canon shot ]
♥ short story – Orange I: The Reflection of Her Rebirth
– 20 Vi♍o 10, Moon’s Day [ canon ]
♥ Red III: The Colour of Her Crafts
– 19 Lib♎a 10, Tyr’s Day [ canon ]
♥ shot – Layer 7 – The Eye of the Storm
– 13 Ge♊ini 11, Moon’s Day [ canon shot ]
♥ shot – Layer 6 – The Drizzle
– 10 Ge♊ini 11, Frigg’s Day [ canon shot ]
♥ shot – Layer 5 – The Rapids
– 07 Ge♊ini 11, Tyr’s Day [ canon shot ]
♥ shot – Layer 4 – The Stream
– 04 Ge♊ini 11, Saturn’s Day [ canon shot ]
♥ shot – Layer 3 – The Pool
– 02 Ge♊ini 11, Thor’s Day [ canon shot ]
♥ shot – Layer 2 – The Fountain
– 28 Ta♉rus 11, Saturn’s Day [ canon shot ]
♥ shot – Layer 1 – The River
– 25 Ta♉rus 11, Woden’s Day [ canon shot ]
♥ Living in Sin – Two Houses (Both Alike In Dignity)
– 13 Ta♉rus 11, Frigg’s Day [ singapore politics ]
♥ Living in Sin – The Problem Here
– 10 Ta♉rus 11, Tyr’s Day [ singapore politics ]
♥ you don’t look at me anymore
– 05 A♈ies 11, Tyr’s Day [ eden ]
♥ Strange Verse
– 22 Pi♓es 11, Tyr’s Day [ verses ]
♥ short story – Green VII: The Dream of Her Desolation
– 23 Cap♑corn 11, Sun Lord’s Day [ canon ]
♥ shot – Orange Interlude: The Reflection of Her Requests
– 01 Lib♎a 10, Frigg’s Day [ canon shot ]
♥ poem – Ghost
– 20 Pi♓es 11, Sun Lord’s Day [ eden poetry ]
♥ The Heart
– 19 Pi♓es 11, Saturn’s Day
♥ Esmerelda Weatherwax
– 26 Cap♑corn 11, Woden’s Day [ witches Pratchett ]
♥ Six100
– 25 Cap♑corn 11, Tyr’s Day [ eden shot ]
♥ The World Owes Me A Living
– 22 Cap♑corn 11, Saturn’s Day
♥ First Responses
– 21 Cap♑corn 11, Frigg’s Day
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Then Ialdabaoth proclaimed “Let there be the Moon, the Aeon of Spirit!”
And the Queen of the Night was created, and Ialdabaoth saw that the worlds were separated by the abyss of night.
